WIPping it Up

Wednesdays seem to come around quickly these days. I’m actually writing this post with time to spare which lately hasn’t been the case. I figure I must be overdo for some kind of update, especially for those of you anxious for Emergence to be done. The good news is I finished the first round of editing and will now go through and fix all the plot holes, inconsistencies, bad story arcs, and whatever other problems I spied during my red penning. Once that’s finished, I’ll send the ms off to a few Alpha readers for general gleanings. Another round or two of editing and it will make its way to the Betas. Now, as it happens, I may have an opening or two for Betas on this project. If you’ve already read First of Her Kind and would like to Beta read Emergence, drop me a line via comments or e-mail. But I’ll warn you right up front, I have high standards for my Betas. I expect them to be 100% honest and downright brutal — in a caring sort of way, of course. I have a thick skin, access to a chocolate pool, and don’t much care for sugar-coating. I want to put out the best book possible. That means pain. If you can slap me every time I slip into adjective hell, use weasel words, get passive, start telling instead of showing, aren’t making sense, have wussy characters, need to kill a darling, or any of the other 100s of nit-picky things that drive readers and writers bonkers, then you may just fit the bill.

In the meantime, I’ve added to my word count on both The First House and Crossing Paths. Though in the case of the latter, I need to do some noodling over plot issues before I can comfortably continue.

I made a list of drawings I intend to include with The First House when it’s released. The plan is to start releasing it toward the end of this year as a serial. At this point I don’t know how many episodes there will be, but I do know I have more Quinn and Grady stories brewing so there will be other volumes next year.

Other than that, I’m waiting on the release of two anthologies I’m included in, and just generally planning all sorts of creative mischief and mayhem.

Now, on to the important part of Wednesday. Today is 07-17-13. In its honor, I give you 17 sentences from Crossing Paths. This is from a scene I have written that may or may not make the final cuts. As of this point, it’s sitting in a file appropriately named Scenes because I’m not that far into the story yet. But I’m not a linear writer and often have disjointed snippets laying around, waiting for inclusion. In this particular bit, Ethan has gotten some information on his past and is seeking answers from a priest. Unfortunately, he’s only recently met the priest and it wasn’t under the best of circumstances.

“Hello, Father.”

The priest fumbled the candlesticks in his hands, and one hit the floor with a musical clatter. Ethan retrieved it for him and met the icy disapproval with half a smile.

“Sorry about that.”

The priest snatched the candlestick back as though he thought Ethan might change his mind and keep it. Or maybe clock him across the skull with it. “I had hoped we wouldn’t see each other again.”

Ethan frowned. “That’s not very priestly of you. Whatever happened to all that love thy neighbor crap?”

“I was thinking more along the lines of deliver me from evil.” He wet his lips and visibly composed himself. “What can I do for you?”

“Drive a stake through my heart?”

The priest’s eyes widened.

Ethan put his hands up, palms out. “Just kidding.”

 

Ethan. *sigh* He can be such an ass but I really do like him. Now, if I can just figure out one or two things . . . well, I think Crossing Paths is going to be pretty dang good. Quite different than most everything else I’ve ever written.

Now, go forth and spread the WIPpeteer love. Don’t forget, you can find us on Twitter slinging around the #WIPpeteer hash tag. And if you missed Monday’s post, I’ve jumped onto ReGi McClain’s awesome Mirth & Music Monday bandwagon because everyone needs a little something for their start to the work week. #MirthMusicMonday

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29 Comments:

  1. Nice dialogue! I love “all that love thy neighbor crap.” Very nice. 🙂

    I’d be happy to beta read for you if you need me. I’m half-way through First of Her Kind, hoping to finish when we’re on vacation at the end of the month. I guess you probably want to see how I react to that before you sign me up for anything, though. Like, if I wrote a review that said, “I liked this, but it needed more clowns and prop comedy,” you maybe wouldn’t want me to give suggestions on the next one?

    • Consider yourself on my Beta list. It will be a while — I have some heavy duty filling in and patching to do. I’m hoping by September. But no, unfortunately, no clowns or prop comedy — although there are a few moments where my dry humor comes through. And Garek, well, he’s funny — plays the part of Bolin’s foil, I think.

  2. And I just bought First of Her Kind, so I wouldn’t be a good candidate.
    As for this excerpt, I giggled at this: “I was thinking more along the lines of deliver me from evil.” Love the humor.
    I like a nonlinear approach (ala Christopher Nolan’s movies). I often write scenes and leave them in a file until I can find a place to put them. I read this great post on nonlinear structure: http://ingridsnotes.wordpress.com/2013/07/08/alternative-structures-part-2/

    • Thank you! 🙂

      I giggled when I wrote it, too. I thought it a snappy comeback. Hmm . . . I’m going to have to check out that post on nonlinear structure. Sounds right up my alley.

  3. Nice excerpt Kathi. 🙂 I liked the tension in the scene and the way it’s kind of ominous. What’s been going on? The priest seems very jumpy.

    • Well, let’s just say the priest saw Ethan for what he is. And the company he was in at the time has the poor priest quite shaken. He’ll be even jumpier by the end of their conversation.

  4. Thanks for thew plug. 🙂

    I like the last three lines the best. That moment when you’re not sure whether the person asking you to do something outrageous is being serious or not can really be unsettling. Of curse, then it becomes an opportunity to laugh at yourself, but somehow I don’t see that being in the next few sentences for this story.

    • Always a pleasure to plug you, ReGi. Um . . . I mean . . . hey! did you see that squirrel. *cough*

      No, not much laughter in the next several paragraphs but I don’t dare give away too much. Ethan does like to be a smart-arse, though.

  5. Heeee, snarky priest! Love it! This made me giggle.

    • I don’t know any priests personally, but I figure they’re human and can be just as snarky as the next person. I did know quite a few nuns and they could be quite witty, even a bit sassy at times.

      • The priest at the church I used to go to knew that we all thought the choir mistress was a little bit psycho, so he’d raise an eyebrow at us and then mime hitting her over the head with the thing he used to splash the holy water over the congregation (also probably not very priestly behaviour). She knew he was there but didn’t know what he was doing apart from the fact that it was making us giggle and not concentrate on our music.

  6. I really like the exchange here in the dialogue. Witty banter, but you know there’s some dangerous undertones.

  7. Great dialogue and I love Ethan’s cheekiness ‘That’s not very priestly of you’. The priest ‘wetting his lips’ made me cringe – a really troubling image and I’m not sure why but the priest gave me the shivers.

    • Hmm…interesting take on the priest. He’s mainly unnerved by Ethan — a pretty common response to almost anyone who finds out what he is, or thinks they know.

  8. Nice excerpt! The dialogue immediately gives you a feel for the characters and their relationship and hints at lots that’s going on beneath the surface.

    • Thanks, Ruth. Yes, there’s a lot going on. I kind of feeling sorry for dragging the priest into it because I think he may end up playing just a slightly larger role than originally intended.

  9. Love the dialogue and the un-priestly behaviour. The undertones are wicked.
    Knew a priest once who did a drunken song-and-dance at the parish concert–a money raiser for the church roof. Needless to say, he was maybe mid-thirties, the teenagers liked him cause he was down-to-earth, but he didn’t stay a priest long.

    You leave me breathless with all the writing you accomplish. Two thumbs up for you.

    • I do try to write every day, but usually the weekends get away from me and I end up fitting it in wherever I can during the week. I tried not to write for a space of many years and still managed to fill notebooks with ramblings so I must be meant to do it. No turning back for me now!

      That priest does sound like one that would be quite popular with the younger crowd. Not so much with his elders I’m assuming.

  10. Love the dialogue! Especially the “Love thy neighbor” and “Deliver me from evil” parts.

    I have a scenes folder like that for my stories as well. I’m a linear writer, but occasionally a bit of inspiration will hit and I’ll jot down the scene real quick before I lose it. However it’s very rare that they actually make it into the story.

  11. I’m giggling….as a minister there are a great many people I would like to say things like that to of which I will never say those things to. lol. and his reaction to the driving a stake through Ethan’s heart is fantastic!!

  12. I found the quote I was looking for earlier. (Twitter conversation, only it’s too long to go on Twitter.)

    “… laughter reduces stress, pumps up the immune system, diffuses squabbles, lifts the spirits, broadens the perspective, and feels great. Best yet, it has no calories and can’t make you pregnant.” Karen Scalf Linamen, Welcome to the Funny Farm

    I also read in some health journal that deep belly laughs are actually a better abdominal exercise than crunches, or just about any other official exercise, since they incorporate every abdominal muscle. So, while you may not be able to laugh your booty off, you may be able to laugh your belly (if you have one) off. 🙂

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