WIPpet, WIPpet Good!

Fine, bad pun title.

Today’s WIPpet is from Chapter 13 of Emergence and just slightly over 13 lines. To set the scene just a tad, the group is riding through the Greensward at night, and the men have just realized that Nialyne is responsible for the gentle glow lighting their path. Magic is something not everyone is comfortable with, as is the case with Garek. (As usual, keep in mind, this is first draft stuff you’re seeing. Which means it’s ROUGH, and may or may not make editing cuts.)

Bolin heard the men whispering in soft tones, awe in their voices. They’d obviously realized the light was Nialyne’s doing.

Beside him, Garek gave a shudder. “Spooky stuff. Don’t know how you deal with it.”

The way Sandeen felt like a coiled spring beneath him, Bolin guessed the stallion had no appreciation for the much spookier stuff in his saddlebag. He tossed his head and pranced, and Garek’s horse shifted sideways, ears pinned back.

“What’s got him all bothered?” Garek asked.

Bolin reached out to stroke Sandeen’s neck. “My baggage.”

“That explains nothing.”

“I don’t think you really want a more involved explanation.”

Garek caught his meaningful look and rolled his eyes. “I’ll not avoid it on this trip, will I?”

“Not likely.”

“Well, you can keep it.” He dropped a hand to his sword. “Me and the lads will trust sinew and steel.”

“Let’s hope those will suffice.”

Okay, now click the Linky button and go visit the other WIPpeteers or spooky stuff may just befall you.

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20 Comments:

  1. I think I’ll like this Garek. Whether it stays or not, I’m glad you posted! A great look into some of the characters 🙂

  2. Great dialogue between Bolin and Garak and a good contrast between magic and brawn. I’m intrigued to know what the ‘spooky stuff’ in Bolin’s saddlebag is…

  3. Intriguing! I just came from looking at the other WIPpeteers. I might just join in- and I’m going to have to follow your blog to get more of this story. 🙂

  4. I like the characterisation of the two men and the way the horse’s unease comes into it too – he obviously doesn’t like the situation either. Good stuff!

    • Thanks, Elaine. Sandeen becomes very much his own character in this series and usually does a good job of demanding page space. 🙂

  5. I’m intrigued, Kathi!

  6. Well done! Like someone else said above, I may have to join become a part of this process, too.

  7. *snicker* I’m sure the WIP-whip thing will get old for lots of people really quickly, but I think it’s fun. 🙂

    So… is the bag filled with dark magic? Or the head of a dark magician? Ambiguous bags have so much potential for the imagination. They’ve held such interesting things over the years. Demons, perhaps? Or maybe Medussa has come along for the ride…

  8. Of course I want to know what’s in the saddle bag, and a nice set up for later unleashing. I have a soft spot for Sandeen. For a horse he’s a great character, I like that he doesn’t like the contents of the bag, but I know he’s tough enough to deal when things get tough.

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