Serving Up A Tasty Dish For WIPpet Wednesday

**Quick aside: Any fantasy authors out there who have experience listing on BookBub, I’m looking for feedback. Pros, cons, success, failure…anything you care to share. Now, back to your regularly schedule post.**

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This was me up until early last week. And I know from a couple blog posts I read, that I wasn’t alone. Seems there were quite a few authors pondering the perfect title to their masterpieces. If you read my WIPpet post last week, I shared the results of my title brainstorming. Since there will likely be more than one Driev tale to tell, I wanted to keep Coinblade Chronicles as the series name, even though I do intend for each story to be a stand-alone, and may just decide to write some from other character POVs. I’m delighted to say, the overwhelming majority of those who commented, chose the sub-title I was leaning toward: Bound in Shadow.

So, for this weeks WIPpet, from the newly christened Coinblade Chronicles: Bound in Shadow I give you 23 sentences for the 23rd. To set the scene just a bit, Driev has been ‘persuaded’ to pay a visit to the home of Lady Ryaninn Sonra. The persuasion came in the form of five well-armed men who wouldn’t take no for an answer. Driev found the lady to be…attractive, and spent some time giving her the once-over. This excerpt starts with her talking. 

“You don’t remember me do you?”

I shook my head as much to clear it as in answer to her question. “Should I?”

“Perhaps not.” She moved with an innate grace I think most woman consciously practice. “I saved your life after you allowed your father the opportunity to take it.”

“I suppose you feel I owe you something for that?”

Her eyebrows rose in an elegant arch. “You’re an intriguing man, na Lord Talbert.”

“Just Driev, if you don’t mind.”

“Forsaking your father’s title?” she asked, settling into a high backed chair, poised like a queen on a throne. “I’m not surprised.”

“Why is it I’m here?”

Her gaze wandered over me much the way mine had wandered over her, only I’m fairly certain I hadn’t looked like a starving person just offered a plate of food. I spread my arms to the side and made a slow circle.

“Like what you see?” I asked.

She smiled. “Very much so.”

“Well, in that case…” I reached down, making a show of starting to remove my belt. “I honestly thought this was going to go in a completely different direction, given the heavy blades you sent my way. Should I close the door? I don’t care one way or the other, but lady’s discretion.”

 Driev, you dog.

I had hoped to have a surprise for you Driev fans this week, but it looks like it’s going to have to wait. Maybe next week. I ended up being a bit busier than I expected this month. My weekends have been non-existent, which means lots of catching up on things after work during the week.

That’s all I have for you today. Now, get thee hence and visit the Grand Order of WIPpeteers.

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21 Comments:

  1. Hehe, Driev takes negotiating to a whole new level. 😛

  2. Oh, Driev. lol. Last paragraph had my laughing. loved this.

  3. I can already tell I’m going to like Driev! I’m looking forward to joining WIPpet Wednesday! 🙂

  4. Dog indeed! He’s certainly not one to let an opportunity pass him by. *g*

    I stumbled on this sentence: “She moved with an innate grace I think most woman consciously practice.” “I think” seems unnecessary, or maybe figure out another way of getting it across.

    I’ve advertized a couple of times with BookBub. It’s mostly worth it — if you can get them to take your book.

    • I stumbled on that sentence as well…I just didn’t go back and mess with it, but I’ll certainly flag it for future consideration.

      Thanks for the input on BookBub. I’m leaning toward giving it a try…if I can get in.

  5. haha! I want the next part! =P I don’t think that scene went the way most people expected it to go.

  6. Oh my word. I’m TOTALLY crushing on Driev!!! Good grief!

  7. Keepin’ it classy, Driev. LOL! Of course, same could be said of the woman in this scene.

  8. Wait a minute, here! I expect some full frontal nudity and you leave me hanging like that?! *frets and froths in frustration* Love how Driev’s cynical nature makes it into his narrative asides, such as when he thinks that all women practice grace.

    • You’ll just have to use your imagination on the full frontal………..Oops! Sorry, where was I? Ah, yeah, um, cynical nature? Driev? Okay, maybe just a little. 😉

  9. Well, I can’t say Driev is shy. And so courteous… 🙂

    • Some people are cocky because of an overabundance of ego and self-esteem. Driev is just because, basically, he doesn’t care. And of course, he’s the epitome *cough* of courtesy, having been raised in the upper class world. *rolls eyes* Right.

  10. Quite the smoothie, isn’t he? I may be the unpopular one here, but I’m kind of hoping for a hilariously humiliating fail. I like Driev and all, but that much arrogance deserves a good kick in the pants.

  11. I LOVE this excerpt so much. The flow is flawless and this line,”she moved with innate grace…” had me wishing I could come up with such a clever sentence. 🙂 We’ll done. These characters are super intriguing!

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